Thank you for your interest in Expiation! Before we're able to fully review your app, the mod team has some areas where we would like for you to add more detail or information. we believe this can be revised and would like to request the following:
The mod team finds the personality section incomplete. We would like to see the listed personality traits written out and expanded upon. How do these traits manifest in the character? How do they make them who they are? You can use examples from the canon to support your description. Here is one example app. We recommend you to look around the application post for more examples.
The samples you linked are also too short. We would require to have at least 5 comments from your character in each thread.
Please note that you have 3 days to submit your revisions. If you miss this timeline, you will have to wait until the next application cycle (December 2024) to resubmit.
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The mod team finds the personality section incomplete. We would like to see the listed personality traits written out and expanded upon. How do these traits manifest in the character? How do they make them who they are? You can use examples from the canon to support your description. Here is one example app. We recommend you to look around the application post for more examples.
The samples you linked are also too short. We would require to have at least 5 comments from your character in each thread.
Please note that you have 3 days to submit your revisions. If you miss this timeline, you will have to wait until the next application cycle (December 2024) to resubmit.